Furthermore, after the removal of Mr Jones, more things grew the seed of doubt growing in Mollie’s head. All her ribbons were set on fire, she was barred from getting to eat sugar, and worse still, having to do field work. She couldn’t live like a carthorse, so she found ways to navigate around the restrictions. Mollie disappeared when it was time for work and only returned for meals, she stole ribbons from the master bedroom in the house, and never showed a shred of sympathy for her fellow animals. Then, the battle begun. While her friends were fighting bravely for their freedom, Mollie was cowering in her stall, totally unaware of her friend’s sacrifices. This shows Mollie has made up her mind about the revolution. She obviously doesn’t want to be a part of it, not even for her fellow animals. You see her act selfishly through the entire novel, and before it might’ve just been a petty grudge, but now, now Mollie wants nothing to do with the liberation of Manor Farm.
Really good description of how Mollie is changing due to the events happening around her. Just remember to make those connections to the outside world and the author’s purpose. That will really strengthen your paragraphs. Well done.