In the novel “Animal Farm”, there lies a sweet show pony named Mollie, decorated in ribbons, and eating sugar, until the rebellion occurs, and she becomes selfish, self serving and downright lazy. At the beginning she is just a little vain and self serving, until her luxuries have been stripped away from her, due to the rebellion and she runs away, seeking comfort. She never wanted the rebellion, as she was better off. She’s not committed to the rebellion, she never really was, to begin with.
This is a well worded introduction, good job. You have done a good job of addressing the description element to the question, however you have not clearly stated the points you will address in you essay. Remember you need to “explain how” these changes occurred. This is a great start. Good job!